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Chapter 1:"Alterra's New Assignment"= " Beep Beep Beep Beep Beep Beep Beep Beep! Warning! The Hull Breach detected on port side has ruptured Buoyancy Capsule 1! " " I Know I Know Damnit! " I shouted back to the Seamoth's automated voice impatiently as I looked for the repair tools stored in the Seamoth shining titanium interior compartment." Where is the Welder!? " I thought in my head as I frantically searched through the storage behind the pilot chair. My Seamoth was plummeting into the darkness of the deep ocean trench. The front of the Seamoth faced upwards. I watched as the blue water from the sun shining becoming fainter and farther away. Darkness, fleeing air bubbles, and chunks of rock breaking away from the boulder stuck on the Seamoth's back port side like birds flying off a tree and into the distance. I could feel the sensation of my ears being crushed increase by the second. " Warning safe depth has been passed, approaching crush depth! Estimated time until Seamoth destruction: T-3 minutes! " The system warned me. My eyes widened and I stopped digging around the cluttered storage bin when those words came to my ears. I slowly turned around and looked at the control panel. All I could see from it was flashing red lights and messages of engine failure and crush depth. Sparks shot out of the control panel and the left side violently. " Come on! " I screamed in anger as I grabbed the manual controls with my hands and pressed my feet up against the round smooth bubble glass window separating the water outside from me inside my Seamoth. My muscles started to tense up as I pulled, my teeth clenched, eyes closed, I pulled on the center stick with every hope and desire to live in me. I opened my eyes and saw that all of my efforts had no effect.

I relaxed my body into the pilot chair and sadly watched my Seamoth plummeting deeper into the abyss. A sudden melancholy feeling of distress and despair flooded through me, extinguishing the spark of determination and hope. My throat dried as if I were about to burst into tears. I solemnly reached over to my right and picked up my half full water bottle. I sat there and imagined the clear liquid being replaced with some ice cold cola. I drank the water from my bottle without a care in the world about what was happening. I stopped and slowly turned the plastic cap back on. " Warning! Crush Depth has been reached! Ascend immediately! " I heard the automated voice say. I didn't care about it, I placed my water bottle back where I left it before. I didn't want to die this way, I don't want to feel the pain." I would rather take my own life than die like this. " I solemnly murmured to the darkness behind the glass bubble protecting me. I knew that I would never see my family again, but my time had come to an end. The end which I will chose how it happens myself. I slowly crawled out of the pilot chair and over to the titanium storage container. I pulled out the large black carton with red lines and a skull painted on it that said:" Bleach ." I faintly smiled and closed the titanium storage container. I sat back down into my chair and slowly unscrewed the plastic cap that was in the way of the end of this suffering. I raised it slowly to my mouth, cocked my head back on the pilot seat's soft cushiony headrest, and closed my eyes tightly. I slowly titled the container, I could sense the liquid coming to the brim. I could faintly hear the system murmuring a warning to me. I could hear cracks starting to split into the corners of the bubble cockpit as the water desperately tried to get inside my Seamoth. The liquid was starting to peak and almost spill over, a tear fell from my eye. Suddenly I stopped to think. I lowered the bleach away from my mouth and opened my eyes and thought. I thought what have I gone through to make me end up in such despair? Where did I go wrong?

" beep beep Beep Beep Beep! " I slowly dragged my head across the soft pillow and swatted around looking for the source of the pestering alarm clock. I finally padded my hands around the metal noise maker and I slowly drew up a fist. Then I calmly pressed the off button on top. I rolled off of the couch still wrapped in my blanket. I continued to roll and the soft blanket unraveled on the smooth floor. " Lights " I moaned groggily after just waking up. The room was still pitch black with an eerie silence. " Lights! " I shouted angrily and all of the lights in my room turned on. " Ugh " I groaned Groggily as I stood up off of the smooth metal flooring. I staggered over to the Fridge hazily as if I were trying to do the drunk shuffle. I bumped into the sharp corner of the hard granite counter and I shouted:" Ah! Ow..... " I tried to piece together what was in front of me inside the nice fridge as I groggily rolled my eyes around. I couldn't see a thing. My vision was very very blurry. I started to make out the nice outlines of the gorgeous fridge's colorful contents. The top rack only had ice cold glass bottles full of cola. I smiled contently and reached into the cold fridge to grab my delicious wake up drink. I stabbed my talon through the shiny metal bottle cap and pulled it off like a cork in a bottle. I stood there in my kitchen with my eyes closed and I chugged down the brown sugary soda. I started to feel a pleasant buzz in my head as my body movements started to regain its previous normality. I stop halfway in and opened my eyes. I carefully placed the transparent bottle near the edge of the smooth granite kitchen counter and walked to the bathroom how someone who hasn't had a hangover would. The gray metal door slid open and the lights inside the shiny white bathroom chimed on.

The water was running out of the shower head like a hose. I stood inside the shower surrounded by glass sliding doors. My fur was soaked with water and I brushed it a little so it won't feel so heavy. My eyes were closed and I was partially unconscious in enjoying the ambient sound of falling water, until:" Knock Knock Knock. " I heard from the door. I looked up and threw my head down and sighed. Then the knocking became persistent. The towel hung from the rack so I grabbed it and tried to get all of the water out of my fur. I then dressed myself into casual clothing as quickly as possible and left the nice bathroom. By the time I reached the close metal entry door the knocking became rapid fire. I punched the metal lightly to let whoever was knocking that I was awake and not dead. " What? It's 5:30 in the morning what do you wa- " I stopped as I turned my head away from the kitchen clock and faced the person behind making me cut my shower short. " Oh... Sorry about that Johan. Come on in. " I smiled to him. We both sat on the comfy sofa in the middle of the room facing the front door. We both stared at each other gesturing one another to talk first. " I heard we are getting a new assignment from Alterra! " Johan announced with glee, bouncing on the couch a little. My smile drooped and I raised my left eyebrow and gestured the " are you serious? " Gesture. Johan's happy expression quickly changed when he realized I wasn't too happy. " Roderick relax. This will be the last mission. " Johan reassured me. I sighed and replied irritated:" Johan... that's what they said about the Last assignment. " I reassured him angrily. I sat up and walked over to the kitchen to grab a fresh bottle of cola from the fridge. " You didn't finish that cola. " Johan told me as he pointed to the one sitting still on the smooth granite counter. I closed the fridge and grabbed the half full one and gulped down the rest of the soda. " It's almost the summer. That means I can finally go see my family again Johan. It's been a year! I was promised that I can go! " I angrily complained while shaking the empty cola bottle in my hand. " First Aftermath gets a Reboot with a shitty name like Aftermath Is Not Dead, or AIND. Now I have to do this assignment by Alterra. " I said angrily, I stopped for a second and noticed that Johan was staring at me in a strange way. " Forget the first sentence I just said.. stupid writers and lack of a series management. " I said to Johan. " Well pal, this will be the last assignment. I heard some rumors that this is a big mission. Maybe when we come back our faces will be on the news! " Johan announced with glee. " Sure, I'd rather not be identified by the news. After all finding furries here are rare, we only make up 2% of the country population. " I replied to Johan. " I don't understand what that has to do with the Mission. " Johan replied a bit confused. " What it means is that I think there will be some distrust. " I relied irritated. " Well, how about we talk a bit more about this some other time. " Johan smiled. " Ingenious idea. " I happily replied. Johan sat up and I tossed him an ice cold bottle of cola on his way out the front door. When Johan had walked out of my apartment room and closed the door I lazily slumped on the couch. Alterra could never keep their promises, they are like snake oil sales men. Alterra with their promises, using them to fuel us. This assignment better be important and not some clean up duty.

Actually, thanks to Squidy, I have accessed all of the old ones and saved them for reference. Here is the old introduction for chapter 1:" '''Warning! Hull integrity low and falling. Estimated time of destruction in T -minus 1 minute' the seamoth systems alerted me. My seamoth was plummeting into darkness. I felt sick as the seamoth spun wildly out of control. I just sat there in the chair feeling melancholy. I knew that this was the end. I grabbed my water bottle and imagined it were wine and drank up. The seamoth control throttle was dismembered from the base, so all I could do was sit and watch. I didn't want too die at the hands of a damaged seamoth. I always said:"I don't want to let someone or something my life. I'd rather die in my own hands instead of their's." I eyed some bleach in the corner which I was going to make water out of. I reached over and picked up the bottle. I unscrewed the cap slowly with fear. Before I could chug it down I sat and recompiled my thoughts. How did I end up in this situation?"''

See the big difference? The new intro to chapter one is more emotional, immersive, and has more action

Chapter-£*¿|‰!;"B3t@"= Something rough and chunky was under my sleeping body. The couch wasn't supposed to feel like dirt. The cold air churned around me as I lay there. I slowly padded my claws around and scanned the peculiar environment surrounding me. The sound of the smooth blades of grass crumbling under my claws echoed all around me. My eyes shot open as if a gun were fired next to me. I quickly bounced my tired body up into a standing position. The sky was a murky dark color and I could barely see the outline of my claws in front of me. I cautiously reached for my handy USP match, waiting for something to jump out at me. I slowly drew my USP match up to head level and aimed down the faintly red iron sight. A steadily increasing noise surrounded me from all sides. These sounds, or voices sounded corrupt. Cries of help and sorrow surrounded me like a tunnel of wind. I looked and aimed around cautiously with my brain spinning. I noticed a faint white light slowly approaching, the desperate screams and cries around me became louder and louder the closer the light was to me. I aimed at the slowly approaching suspicious light. I heard crunches of dry grass the closer it was. Suddenly I heard a collective of voices say:" I am the one whom the Narrators fear at night, the one who feeds off the power of the weak. The time has come, we can finally be together again. Roderick ... This time you will have nowhere to run. Viridia cannot save you now........ " the voice echoed. I didn't stop to ask any questions and I started to fire at the thing with my gun, the flashes of light were so bright I squinted every time. Every flash I could see what it looked like. The creature's dark body looked almost like tar, it had 3 nailless claws on each of it's four legs. The grass shriveled up and died when it was near its feet. I didn't stop shooting. Black goop flew off of it's body, but it still continued to approach me without being hurt as the goop slowly slithered back to its tar like body. I stopped firing, shocked at what I just saw. " Don't be afraid, soon you will be part of us... " it echoed toward me. I turned around in panic and sprinted away as fast as I could, the crunches of grass under my feet echoed through the air, the screams and cries became louder as I ran. I felt afraid. Fear was something I have never felt in a very long time, but now I was truly afraid. I started to hear splashes from under my feet, the outline of slender brick buildings towered up into the murky clouds. Lightposts without lights lined the streets, the whole street was almost flooded with water. The change in my environment didn't stop me from running. I could hear the screams come from the corners and alley ways I passed. I didn't hesitate to stop running at all. I closed my eyes in fear and ran. Something knocked me down real hard after I closed my eyes. I quickly opened my eyes to see a brick wall, the ledge slightly out of my reach. The cold breeze came closer and the screams were louder. I turned around and saw the thing approaching me. " You have nowhere to run Roderick, your time has come. Viridia can't help you now... " Its collective voice echoed to me. I turned around and frantically tried to grasp the bricks on the wall to make an escape. The hard bricks were damp and slippery, my trembling claws slipped every time I grabbed one. I turned around one last time to see the white light in my face. I reached behind me to kick off the wall. " Crunch ." The sounds of glass shattering echoed throughout the ghost city, all of the cries stopped dead silent.

" AHH!!! " I screamed and rolled off of my couch. Frantically I crawled back to the couch and reached for my handgun. I stopped and looked around. I was back in my dark silent apartment. My cozy blanket was on the cold metal ground under me and I was drenched in cold sweat. I looked at my hands and rotated them, they were uncontrollably shaking. I started to relax my body and breathe steadily again. I slowly and sat up, suspicious of every move and looked around for what woke me up. I looked until noticed light reflecting off of a broken glass bottle laying in the floor. " I must have panicked in my sleep and knocked it over. " I re-assured myself. I snatched my PDA off of the coffee table and checked what time it was. I squinted as the blue light flooded into my eyes. The screen was blurry at first but my sensitive eyes slowly adjusted to the bright light. The time read:" 1:26 AM. " I quickly reached for my Nokia phone on the coffee table and speed-dialed Viridia's number into the loose buttons. The phone made some buzzing noises and then Viridia picked up on the other end of the line.

__________________________________________________________________ Viridia : Hello?

Roderick : Viridia!? Hearing your voice again feels so good. I miss you so much.

Viridia : I'm sorry? You sound a little raspy. Are you alright?

Roderick : I had a dream.

Viridia : one second, let me grab the notepad... alright go ahead.

Roderick : something was chasing me, it had: 4 legs, 3 claws on each, tar like body, unaffected by bullets, and a glowing white round light on its face, no other facial features. The voice it has sounds like multiple people are saying it. I heard screams when it was chasing me, and all the grass around it died.

Viridia : Roderick... I need you to go to your friend's place.

Roderick : what? Why Viridia?

Viridia : grab your blanket, your PDA, and your phone and run! Avoid looking at reflections and mirrors at all costs! Make sure you are not in a room alone! Don't ask just do it! I will explain more tomorrow.

Roderick : Ok I will go to my friend's apartment.

Viridia : Alright Roderick. Stay safe, get 9 hours of sleep or more, and call me in the morning. Bye Roderick, I love you.

Roderick : Ok, love you sis, bye!

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I hung up and wrapped my phone in my blanket. I placed it on the couch and walked to the bathroom steadily to splash some water in my face. The lights chimed on and the door opened quickly when I approached. I turned on the faucet and splashed some nice cold water onto my sweaty face. My fur became even more damp. I turned the faucet off slowly and stood up to walk out of the bathroom. I took a quick glance at the mirror and noticed something peculiar. I stopped and my eyes shot over at the mirror and I stared at the mirror surprised and shocked. The creature stared back at me from the mirror sinisterly. I could start to hear the cries of help and screams echo around me. The creatures tar like head started to morph through the mirror, black tar dripped down into the sink. I darted out of the bathroom and grabbed my stuff from the couch. I could notice black tar slowly oozing out of the bathroom. I sprinted to the front door and left my room. I was sweating cold again. My claws trembled with fear as I leaned against the hallway. I turned and saw to my horror, black stuff oozing through the door. I darted down the hallway without hesitation, I could feel the adrenaline rush and the sound of my feet hitting the floor as I sprinted away from the beast. I ran until I reached Johan's room and started to frantically bang on the door. I could see the paint around the corner of the hallway starting to flake and fall off as the creature slowly came around. Finally the door opened and Johan stood there confused. " Roderick what are you doi- Wah! " He shouted as I pushed him out of the way in mid sentence as I ran inside and locked the front door. " Hey! What was that all about? " Johan asked me irritated as he slowly sat up. " Sorry " I said as I panted, cold sweat dripped from my fur. " Can I stay here for the night? " I asked him cooly. " Don't you have a room to sleep in? " He asked me as his eyes darted from my rolled up blanket then back to my face. " I take that as a yes. " I Answered him as I walked over to his couch. His room was fully lit as if it were day. " Are you alright? Your covered in cold liquid and your hands are trembling. " He asked me suspiciously. " I'm.... fine " I said, my mouth was trembling. " Can I take a shower? " I asked feeling relieved. " Sure. " Johan replied and walked over to prepare the furnished bathroom. " Wait, cover up the mirrors first. " I told Johan before he walked into the bathroom. " Why? What's wrong with mirrors? " He asked me very confused. " I will tell you later. " I replied. Johan shrugged off his question and spent some time to throw towels over all of the mirrors. " Alright, I covered the mirrors like you asked, is there anything else you need from me? " He asked me expecting me to ask him to prepare more stuff for the bathroom. " No... That's all. " I replied. " Alright than. " Johan muttered as I calmly walked to the bathroom. When I entered the bathroom, I looked around to make sure all of the mirrors were covered, every last one was. I removed my sweat drenched clothing and slit open the obscured glass door and flipped the switch for hot water.

After 12 minutes I finally turned off the nice warm shower. The once shiny white room was clouded with mist. I opened up the wet sliding glass door and grabbed a white towel and tried my best to dry my damp fur. I wrapped the towel around my damp waist. I stepped over to the door and firmly knocked twice. " Yes? " I heard Johan answer from behind the door. " Do you have any spare clothes? Mine are soaked. " I replied through the door. " One minute... okay here you go. " Johan said as he quickly slid some clean clothes through a crack in the door. I put my legs into the pants and pulled the shirt onto my body. I hit the button and the bathroom door slid all of the way open. " Your clothes are tiny. " I remarked towards Johan. " I think the right thing to say would be Thank You. " Johan replied rather irritated by my previous remark. " And that too. " I answered satisfied. I strode over and pulled the couch to Johan's room. " Why are you moving the couch into my room. I'd rather not have both of us sleeping in the same room. " Johan told me irritated even more. " Johan... You know that I would consider this to be an act of heresy, but you probably know something is wrong if I run to your room and shove you out of the way. " I replied. " Alright, just make the couch face the wall instead of me. " Johan said as he entered his room. I continued it drag the soft couch into his room and made it face away from his bed. I would never want to do this, but after seeing what I have just seen, Viridia knows best right now.



Writer message- So in the chapter, B3t@, or Beta, I'm trying to introduce a horror element into the story, this short chapter will takes place in between chapters one and two. And I am worked on B3t@ to practice my ability to write horror content. Chapter 2 teaser:"FUBAR"=

Chapter 2:" FUBAR. "

" Beep Beep Beep Beep Beep Beep ". I slowly opened my groggy eyes and peered around cautiously. I was staring at a smooth metal wall. " Ligh- "" Lights! " Johan interrupted me and the blinding lights on the ceiling shot on in a split second. I squinted my light sensitive eyes and waited for them to slowly adjust to the rooms lighting. I slowly peered over the edge of the couch. Johan exited the bedroom when I looked over the edge. " Roderick, you need to drag the couch back into the living room. " Johan said over his shoulder as he walked to the kitchen. I pushed the cozy blanket off my body as I stretched out my sore limbs. My vision was blurry like usual. I pulled myself up and walked away from the couch and into the living room. I turned my head towards the clock to read what time it was. Unfortunately my blurry vision said otherwise and I couldn't see it. " Johan, what time is it? " I asked him while I still stared at the clock dazed. " Certainly not hammer time. " He replied. I stopped, looked over at him and give him the raised eye brow look. " About 5:30 AM " Johan replied to me. " Did you hear that the meeting about the new mission is today? " Johan nervously shouted to me from the kitchen. I gave him the are you serious gesture by raising my left eyebrow. " Yes I'm serious. They announced it yesterday, at 7:00 PM. " Johan replied. " That explains why I didn't see it. " I answered him. I stopped standing in the doorway of the bedroom and strode over to the metal dining table to sit down. I slowly sat into the white cushioned chair next to the shiny metal table. I relaxed myself into the comfy chair and pulled my universal Nokia phone out of my pant pocket. " When are you going to go back to your room? Or for that matter explain to me why you came over to my room? " Johan asked me as he stood in front of the coffee machine waiting for it to brew his coffee. " Give me a minute, I need to talk to Viridia. " I answered Johan trying to throw him off topic. " Ok? " he replied confused still. I dialed Viridia's phone number into the small Nokia phone's shiny weary buttons. Viridia picked up quickly.

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Viridia : Roderick? Are you alright?

Roderick : Yeah. I did make the mistake of looking into a mirror though.

Viridia : Roderick thank goodness you are fine. Did you go back to sleep and follow my instructions?

Roderick : Yeah I did.

Viridia : Next time you see it, don't look into any mirrors.

Roderick : I think I figured that out the hard way.

Viridia : I was digging around through the Counsil logs after you called me yesterday about it. I found something which could possibly be the one you speak of. The thing that attacked you is called:" B3t@ . Or Bthreetat for correct pronunciation. We just call it Beta for short.

Roderick : Alright, so what is it?

Viridia : A creature that devours narrators minds, acquires their powers that way.

Roderick : Okay. I remember it saying something like we can finally be together, and Viridia cannot save you this time.

Viridia : I don't know why, it may be trying to mess with you Roderick. Just get 9 hours of sleep and you should be alright.

Roderick : Okay sis. Shoot I have to go, love you. Bye!

Viridia : I love you too Roderick, Stay Safe. If it appears again, call me.

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AIND, Aftermath Rebooted.... Chapter 2 coming very very very very soon.

Aftermath Is Not Dead. I am restarting the series, I remember the plot line, I plan on improving the writing before. If you remember the original first chapter intro, it wasn't as detailed, emotional, or immersive as the one you are reading now. I plan on enriching all of the old chapters, and new ones to come. Chapter one is now done! If I get access to the old chapters I can make a comparison thing of the difference between the new chapter one and old chapter one. So unlike before. I will have to literally post up to ten chapters in one forum post. So this post will be GIANT.

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